Category: Adult
Seth in Venice
SETH IN VENICE Send by Bird (496 words) At LAX, Seth watched as the girl stood and reached for her backpack overhead across the aisle. Callipygian. The word resonated with Greek ideals of beauty, and it resonated in Seth's head. Normally, he disliked this new style, the low-rise, butt-revealing pants. Dan Ackroyd as a refrigerator repair man on SNL back in the 70s when Seth stayed up that late. Kids, he scoffed. This girl was different. For 3,000 miles, he had barely noticed her, one empty seat away on the aisle. But as they neared LA, Seth had felt himself growing lighter, younger, his East coast heaviness and inhibitions diffusing like wisps of cloud. Now he stared: strip of white satin thong, band of exposed flesh, thin cotton sweatpants clinging to the perfect roundness of her bottom, the tattoo faint beneath the fabric but unmistakable: an arrow-pierced, deep red heart and below it, the words Bad Girl. "I've got a rental car. Need a lift?" he said. "Cool. I'm Ricki." "Where are you headed?" "Venice," she said, "You?" "The Getty," but suddenly the prospects of long afternoons alone in a museum seemed dull, deadly dull. * * * * "There must be some mistake," Seth lied to the Avis woman. "I reserved a convertible." It took an extra ten minutes and it cost, but soon they were in the red Mustang, her blond hair flowing in the breeze. He clicked on the radio. Arrow 93. "Rikki don't lose that number. . ." "That for me?" "Yeah, Steely Dan." "Right. My dad listens to him." Seth, felt old, crushed. "Maybe we could. . . ." Seth said as she stepped from the car near the beach. "That's sweet," she laughed and without turning walked away, waving a hand. You could have a change of heart, Seth muttered to himself, his own heart aching. * * * * "Could you do something about the gray?" Seth asked the stylist. She understood. She darkened his hair, wax his eyebrows, showed him how to smooth creams into his face. Hours. Seth offered up his Amex card, and looked in the mirror at a man twenty years younger. * * * * For more than a week, he wandered the beach, the bike path, the boardwalk, searching the faces. Sometimes he thought he saw her, but no. He tried others pick-ups were not so difficult now but when he asked, "Have you been a bad girl," the response was disappointingly literal. Now he sat on a bench by the boardwalk, tired, his Times open to the arts page. A rollerblader half-pirouetted to a stop and landed beside him. "Hey, I thought it was you. Gee, I'm sorry I blew you off like that." Seth's heart raced. He glanced down at the paper. A famous German painter was in town. In the photo, he did not look well. May as well try rather than die wondering. "Ricki, you were a bad girl." She pressed closer, rested her hand on his thigh, her mouth at his ear. "I know," she purred. "Very bad."
Hal email
Good story. Loved the pictures that were created by the words. They were clear and made the story come alive. There was not one single swat given in this story but it was sure a spanking story. Just proved you don't need a spanking to enjoy a spanking story. This writer of this story did a good job at communicating their ideas to this reader. I think that left just enough to our imaginations to create a very good story. I look forward to reading more stories by this writer. Now for the rest of today at least, I will be thinking of what happened next. This story made us slow down and think. That is always good in todays' rush to do everything in five minutes. Thanks.
SirHal
John Benson email
This is such a subtle, delicate little story, so quietly elegant that when it leaves me dissatisfied, I figure it must be my fault. There must be some cultural or literary reference I failed to get which would give it another meaning. The Steely Dan reference I do get, and the song plays itself softly in my head, hinting at something vaguely wicked, plaintive, a little bit ashamed. But I fail to find the protagonist sympathetic. A bright man old enough to know better changing his plans and changing his appearance to chase after a lost youth and appeal to some vapid hottie. And then it works? If she was a whore, she should have gone for him before. So what is she? Oh, yeah. A vapid hottie. There just has to be more to it than that, but I'm too thick to have found it.
--johnb
Ivy Tran email
A well written a seemingly well thought out masterpiece, a great use of travel with innocence to peak anyone's interest, although the spanking part seems to have been thrown in as an afterthought by the writer. I did enjoy the car part though!