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Category: Adult

Surprise

William Johnson

SSC   Surprise   Adult

I was just lying on the couch with my hand down my
trousers, miles away, picturing lovely things.  

Then I heard someone who sounded like Susan shout
'What are you doing? I have told you not to do that.'

I froze, opened my eyes, and saw Susan my wife, and
Helen, my Mother in Law.  They were both glaring down
at me. They had been shopping together. I knew they
were coming back here, but thought it would be much
later.

'Well' shouted Susan.

'I, erm, well, I was, errr' I trailed off.  It was
obvious what I was doing.

Susan had always made it clear.  If she catches me
doing this I will be disciplined. 

And my Mother in Law is here.  She has spanked me
twice before and is wicked. Maybe Susan will ask her
to go home first.

'Mother, will you help me discipline him?'

'Of course dear. My pleasure.'

Marvellous, I don't think.  The old bat gets to spank
me again.  Looks like two spankings this time.

Susan said 'Tell you what Mother, what about a
competition.  Let's see who can spank him the hardest'

'What's the prize?' Helen asked.

'What do you suggest Mother?'

Great, I thought.  Now it's a game.

'The winner gets to cane him.'

'I don't think that's a good enough prize.  How about
the winner canes him today, and then spanks and canes
him again tomorrow.'

'Or, for the next two days' said Helen

'Sounds good' said Susan.

This was getting out of hand. It was not as though I
had killed anyone. I only touched myself.

'David' Susan suddenly snapped.  'Get everything
ready, including the cane of course.'

I did not hang around.  I knew better than that. I got
it all out. Chair in the middle of the room.  Cane on
the table.  Trousers and pants off, and standing in
front of the women with my hands on my head.
Everything on view, even to Helen.  Very Embarrassing.


Helen said 'Lets get started shall we?'

It was clearly a statement and not a question. She sat
on the chair and called me over.  I bent across my
Mother in Law's knee, and felt her hand rubbing my
bottom.  

Then she gave me a really hard spanking.  I was crying
before very long.  

When she was finished I had to stand facing the wall
for half an hour, to let my bottom cool down. Susan
then called me over and spanked me, but not as hard as
usual. Strange, I thought.

Afterwards I was told to stand in front of them.

'Well David, who spanked the hardest?' Susan demanded.

Looks like the old girl wins. Hell.  She is nasty with
the cane.

I said 'Helen.'

'Excellent' said Helen. 

I was told to get the cane.

I thought I overheard Susan whisper to her Mother
'Happy Birthday Mother, I hope you like your present.'


'Oh yes, thank you dear. I shall really enjoy the next
couple of days' she replied

Hal

This was a nice story and I enjoyed reading it. The word picture were clear. I could not find anything wrong with this story. I have a slight suggestion. With him standing there, nude from the waist down, at least one of the women would have made some comment about his penis. Ok, there is no requirement that they do it in your story. Just a passing thought while the story is fresh in my memory. The story also seemed choppy to me. But that did not distract from the story, but it might have even been better if it was just a little smoother. Keep up the good work.

SirHal

Eric

A spanking story that opens with 'caught-in-the-act' might be expected to maintain the seriousness of such an ominous beginning. But we are pleasantly surprised in 'Surprise'. There is no hilarity in 'Surprise', but its simple style and fast pace could easily have us believing that the author was anxious to treat a 'serious' subject lightly. It would be difficult to end a 'heavy' theme on a birthday celebration.

Alex Birch

Well what a family to marry into!! It's a pleasant mildy amusing tale but I've read this scenario many times before. There was nothing really which lifted this out of the ordinary. The 'happy birthday' at the end, which was the nub of the tale, should have been the closer in my opinion, allowing the reader to hang on that instead of Mother in law making a fairly mundane reply which acted anti-climactically. I'm sorry if this sounds critical but I'm trying to be constructive. Nice effort.