Category: Adult
Poetic Justice
POETIC JUSTICE (ADULT, M/F) Annie smiled as she watched Heather dance for the table, her nipples hardening in the breeze. Even with the harem veil covering her mouth, Annie could see the humiliation in her former rival's eyes. Not that her ridiculous harem costume covered much else. Her breasts were bare, and they bobbled proactively as she danced lasciviously to the exotic Middle Eastern music. The translucent harem pants made it clear that Heather was indeed a natural blonde. When the Sheik asked Joe if Heather should "pleasure him", Annie nodded her consent. Why not? Heather had once been Joe's girlfriend but she was no longer a threat to Annie. Heather was now just a pretty little slave, locked away safe and sound in the mighty Sheik's harem. Boo-hoo! Annie smiled at the poetic justice. Joe and Heather had dated for three years, but Heather had refused to sleep with him. Now Heather would be forced to perform like a 2 bit whore for the man she had once teased to a frazzle. Annie reckoned that if Heather satisfied Joe's vulgar male desires it would relieve the pressure on her. Annie had dated Joe for 6 months, and she enjoyed using the promise of sex to wrap her hapless boyfriend in knots. Annie had no intention of ever sleeping with Joe. Like dogs, men responded best when kept on short leashes. In fact Annie didn't even like Joe very much. He was rich, and his job at the oil company allowed him to ferry her to exotic locations. But to Annie Joe was just another feckless male to use and abuse. Joe was jovial and relaxed the next morning, and Annie knew the once proud Heather had performed her duties well. But when Annie produced Heather's pleading note about the "frame" that had landed her in the harem Joe tensed. "You can't show the Sheik that note!" Joe exclaimed. "She wants me to help her escape!" Heather shot back. "It's against the law, isn't it?" She's a SLAVE!" "She'll get the whip!" Joe shot back. "Really?" Heather said, barely able to conceal her excitement. "Do tell!" As Heather watched her hapless boyfriend pack her steamer trunks she made him describe the humiliating details of the bare bottom whippings the slave girls received. Joe ordered Annie to destroy the note, but Annie flirted with him until he agreed to "let her handle it". Annie smiled. JUSTICE would be served! The thought of her rival stretched over the whipping bench caused Annie to tingle with delight. Before giving the incriminating note to the Sheik Heather scribbled a farewell note to her former rival: ROSES ARE RED AND SO IS YOUR FANNY THEY'LL WHIP YOUR ASS GOOD LOVE, YOUR FRIEND ANNIE "Ah, poetic justice", Annie chuckled. Annie was stunned when the dogs at the airport found the bag of white powder in the bag. As the police led Annie to the slave market, Joe chuckled as he reflected on just how poetic justice could be.
Alex Birch email
I have read other stories by this author and enjoyed them all. I say that as a precursor to saying that I am sadly disappointed with this one. Basically it's a mess. There appears to be character confusion between Annie and Heather, the 'frame' is never properly explained and the whole situation is slightly confused. I'd say this is a classic example of trying to get a late story in 'under the wire' and more haste being less accuracy.
Sorry Joe, rest on your laurels with the others where the humour is sharp and tasty... but write this off to a bad day at the office!
Polara email
The title rather telegraphs the ending, here. I think you did a very good job executing a challenging story structure: Starting in the middle of the story and revealing the beginning while progressing to the end.
The characterization seems a little simple: Man= good/woman=bad. Annie and Heather seem to earn their enslavement and whippings by withholding sex from Joe and possibly taking advantage of him.
It might have been fun to see a little more of Joe's personality. Was he actually a nice guy? The only clue is that he seems to feel sorry for Heather - but who framed her in the first place?
Angie email
Very nice story! I found it very interesting, very different from the normal spanking story, and satisfying at the end when poetic justice is served. I think the author may have mixed up the names of Heather and Annie a few times, but I followed anyway so it was okay.