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Category: Child

Shorter Still

Grace Brackenridge 

"Our story's shorter--and worse!" sniffled 12-year-old
Leona, after reading Shari's "A Short Spanking Story."

Down the hall she could hear the muffled voice of
Joshua, her 18-year-old stepbrother, again
reprimanding Leona's 9-year-old sister, Brianna. Then
she heard the spanking.

Tyrannical Joshua, thought Leona, lording over his
stepsisters while Mom's at work.

Leona looked at the clock. Better hurry!

"Just a food fight," typed Leona. "We never dreamed
Josh would be so mean--spanking us all day long!"

Josh had finished with Leona's spanking. Now in
7-year-old Rebecca's room, he lectured her again.

"Mother still spanks Josh bare," typed Leona, smiling
smugly. "Mom lets us watch. Maybe that's why he's so
strict..."

Another spanking and Rebecca's shrill cries echoed
down the hall. Leona checked the clock, her own bottom
still hot and tingling.

"We're getting three spankings an hour," typed Leona
frantically. "When Mom gets home, we'll have gotten 18
spankings apiece! Not fair!"

Leona heard the knock at her door. Uncertain, she
paused. Then, impulsively, she sent the e-mail to
Pablo anyway. 

"Done, I guess," sighed Leona.

Joshua knocked, harder this time.

"Come in!" she said, pulling down her panties in
back--the way Josh wanted.

Alex Birch

A whimsical piece again which is very readable but to me doesnt have a 'grabber'. The all day spankings would be a case for the NSPCC (ASPCC in America ?) if the kids just didnt damn well enjoy them and that humour comes across well. Its just a bit light on a focal point.

Angie

Okay, I'm going to admit to not really 'getting' this story. I don't really understand why the little girl is writing about the spanking, or whether she's actually happy about it or not. (It would seem not, but then why send the email out?) I kept thinking I was missing something, so I've read the story several times, but it still seems to be missing something. Perhaps if it were developed a little more .. I'm not sure.

Pablo

I very much like the meta-level stuff here: the references to the contest itself, and to other stories. It's clever and fun. Unfortunately the story doesn't really pack anything else in here, which is a shame. Self-references are fine if the self has real substance, but it can't be everything. (Pablo)