Category: Child
Grounded
SSC Grounded Child 'Where have you been?' I snapped. They had both been grounded for the weekend, but with Jane and me out shopping they had obviously gone out. 'Sorry, but...' Peter trailed off when he saw the look on my face. 'Sorry? You will be. Both of you, go and have a bath. You have fifteen minutes to be back down. Don't bother getting dressed. Just drape your towels around you.' John and Peter knew what they were in for now. Jane and I waited in the lounge, sitting on high backed dining chairs. At least I could rely on my daughter John and Peter were back down in good time, clutching their towels. I pointed to the floor in front of us, and they stood there. 'Hands above your heads' I ordered. The towels fell to the floor. They were now naked in front of us both. 'Explain' I snapped. Peter spoke. 'I know we are grounded, but it was so boring here. Alan telephoned and asked us to the park for a game of football. We were only going to be a minute. Then we lost track of the time. Sorry.' 'Sorry? Sorry? And that's it is it? Let's just forget it. Is that it? No, sorry and it won't happen again? No, sorry and I know we have been very naughty. No, sorry and I will do everything you say in future. No, sorry and I deserve a spanking? They both stood very still. I was ready to explode. 'John, I presume you agree with everything that's been said on your behalf?' I asked sarcastically 'Yes Mother. Sorry Mother.' 'Come over here then.' John walked over to me. I turned him to one side, holding his left arm, and swung my right hand with all my force, hitting first the back of his left leg, and then his right leg. John's lip started to tremble. I then turned him to face me. 'You do not misbehave. You do exactly as I say. Do you understand?' I snapped. 'Yes Mother, I will. I am very sorry Mother.' I calmed down a bit. I felt my scolding had sunk in. 'Very well. Now you are 10 you must be better behaved. I am sure you are sorry, but that won't prevent the spanking you have earned.' I took his arm and guided him across my knee. I started to rub his bottom as a prelude. I looked at Peter. 'Take this hairbrush and go over to Jane. She will discipline you today.' 'But she is only 17' he said. 'And you act as though you are 8, not 38. Do as you are told or else Jane will cane you as well. Now' I ordered. Looking distraught, my husband walked over to Jane. She turned him to one side. SMACK. SMACK. She hit him very hard. Our daughter then put him across her knee for the first time ever, and we soundly spanked both of them.
Angie email
This story made me giggle, and I realize that may not have been the desired effect, but it's better than squicking me, right? F/M is seldom my thing, but I think the twist in this is really cool. I actually had to read the last few lines over because I'd missed it at first -- and then it made me laugh out loud. One constructive criticism (well, I hope it's constructive): When you write dialogue, be sure to read it over and make sure that it sounds natural -- like actual speech. There were some places where contractions might have made the dialogue sound more like the way people would speak in their homes. Very nice job and I look forward to reading more of your work soon.
Eric
By the use of convincing dialogue, 'Grounded' cleverly allows the reader to believe that two children are being disciplined. The tension builds until it is relieved by the discovery that the two are actually adults. However, this reviewer feels that four characters was two too many to accommodate within the word limit.
Tami email
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It's just the point of a teenager girl touching the bare ass of her father that I find "unsettling". As a story it very unique and well written but as a concept it just makes me feel uncomfortable. Good Effort.
tamishy