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Angels

Mija

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Angels
by Mija
Child
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The hilltop breeze lifted the girl's hot, sticky hair as the twelve
year-old twirled, eyes closed and arms extended.

"Katie!  Child?"

The girl ran toward the farmhouse.

"Here, Aunt Viola."

A harried-looking woman waved. Two toddlers played nearby while an
infant nursed at her breast.

"More apples!  Still, do tend the fires-- I can't watch them and this
lot!"

Katie blushed, apologizing.

"Never mind, inside with you!"

Fires glowed in the kitchen's stove and hearth.  Heat steamed from
boiling pots.  Her task was to keep the fires burning and the pots from
boiling dry. Tonight, Katie and her aunt would can the sauce, their
winter staple, while her father, uncle and brothers ate supper and
watched the babies.

Canning and harvesting! Katie cringed at the thought of another
miserable week.  Irritated, she tossed more vegetables into the pot and
added wood to the stove. Katie wiped her sweaty brow.  Last year she'd
spent harvest weeks outside gathering fruits, and only helped can 
at night.

Last year, her mother was alive. Everything was different.

Katie's resentment boiled over.  She ran back to her hilltop.

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"Don't fret -- Viola'll whip supper up, James."

Katie froze.  Uncle Nat's voice -- the men were back!  No supper waited,
what would Papa say?  She swallowed hard and stepped into view.

"Martha Kathleen! How could you leave those fires untended?"

"Sorry, Papa.  It was only a minute  --"

He shook Katie by her shoulders.

"Fires untended? Viola left getting supper?"

Katie looked down.  She knew her uncle and brothers were watching.

"I--I'll go help."

She turned but her father's hand stayed her.  He was a kind man but
didn't brook disobedience.  She would not get off so lightly.

"Your aunt'll manage."  He turned to her brothers.  "Boys, help watch
those babes.  I'll be back directly."

Her father held her wrist tightly and led her toward the barn.

Katie started to panic as they passed the cow's stalls, entering her
father's workshop.  He took a heavy leather strop from its hook
beside the door.  Katie cried softly.

Without speaking, her father took her across his knees and leathered the
seat of her skirt.  He held her firmly as her tears turned to wails and
finally sobs.

Then, the punishment over, he tried to embrace her.

Katie tugged away, angry like a little girl.

"It's not fair!  Momma never kept me inside!"

Her father stared and cleared his throat.

"I know she's an angel now!  But I want her here!  Not in heaven!  Here!"

Her father ignored Katie's struggles and pulled her to him.

"Your momma was always the angel in our house, Martha Kathleen.  Now,
we'll --"

Katie heard his voice break as he pushed her away.  She thought she saw
tears.

"-- now, we'll do the best we can."

Katie stood alone, unconsciously rubbing her bottom, feeling the sting
of his words.  She breathed raggedly.  Her whisper echoed in the
emptiness.

"I'll be the angel now, Papa."

Martha Kathleen was a child no longer; in those moments, she became a
woman. 

Haley Brimley

While the story's content is sexist and disturbing, the writing is *really* good. The imagery it evokes is vivid and very powerful, and the author is able to bring a small, realistic world to life with just a few aimed words. Dialogue is direct and to-the-point, as are descriptions, especially characterisations. Again, plot and "morale" are irritating, but that's just an opinion -- the quality of the writing is exceptional, and that's far more objective and deserves rewarding.

Alex Birch

A nice lump in the throat story and nicely written although it's a formula which is not unfamiliar. The characters are well defined but the 'daddy's little girl'.. this will hurt me more than it hurts you, tears in the eyes drama seems to be played over and over in this genre. Nice but not distinctive

Trisha Allen

Great story! I can really identify with this though my mother is still alive. Still being the oldest and having adult responsibilities thrust upon me at an early age, while I wanted to act like the child I was! This brought some memories back for me. Thanks for the story!