SSC 2004: Outrage!, by Alex Birch

OUTRAGE!

by

Alex Birch

Category: Edge

Word count: 501

Major Alan Martin strode into the room, attempting more confidence than
he felt, for this was his chance as first chair to prove his worth.  He
was greeted by Sergeant Mike Duckworth who stood to attention, saluting
smartly.

'At ease, sergeant...' Alan said '...give me the basics'

The basics were straightforward.  Before Basra had been secured a
British medical unit had been attacked by Fedayeen on the main road,
troops had been killed and two female soldiers captured and taken to a
disused army barracks.  Once coalition forces took the city, the
Fedayeen fled and the women were found alive having survived some
harrowing treatment.  Once the women made statements, army intelligence
soon rounded up the likely suspects who had made the identification job
easier by video filming the interrogations. It was Alans's job to
convict the guilty in a military court.

'OK lets roll the evidence!'  Alan said as Sgt Duckworth nodded and
picked up the phone.

Within minutes Alan was seated in front of a large screen as Duckworth
inserted the first video.

The film began, the two young women, one blonde the other a red head
standing to attention in their smart green uniforms, eyes wide with fear
but determined to be stoic.  The six men surrounding them screamed abuse
and poked their chests and stomachs, demanding answers but the girls
remained silent.  Eventually their prime tormentor screamed something in
arabic and by gestures indicated that he wanted them to undress.  Alan
craned forward in his seat as the girls, close to tears, slowly undid
their army tunics and unzipped thir skirts before putting them in a neat
heap on the floor, standing now only in bra and panties as the tirade
continued.  Eventually the arabs each grabbed one of the women and spun
her round to face the wall. Arms were raised and tied to a water pipe
below the ceiling before a long curved knife cut off their bras and
panties leaving both girls naked and weeping.

One of the men produced a long leather whip.  He swung his arm back and
the sharp sound of a whiplash was followed by loud cries and a bright
pink stripe across each girl's bottom, soon joined by many more as the
whipping continued and the girls writhed and shook in their bonds, their
bottoms decorated with livid stripes.

At that point the video finished and Alan stood up, his throat dry, his
legs weak and, to his shame, his penis fiercely erect.  Duckworth stared
at his superior and said quietly 'The john is round the back Sir if you
need to jack off' Alan's face reddened with fury then his eyes filled
with tears of shame as his condition was perfectly obvious.

'It gets us all the same way, Sir...'Duckworth said quietly '...no use
trying to analyse moral rights and wrongs....we're just men and it
happens. Just nail the bastards who did this, Sir, and you'll have done
right by those girls!'

Angie email

This was definitely a "not my kink" kind of story, so I found it harder to read than some others. On the merits of the story alone, I think the writer did a very good job of setting the scene, and also of explaining the officer's shame of having a physical reaction like he did to something that his mind and his heart would find so disgusting and wrong. For that, the story was excellent, because I think MANY of us can identify with finding ourselves inexplicably drawn to something, maybe even turned on by it, when we think we must be horrible people for having such a reaction.

Hal email

This story should have pushed a lot of my buttons. It did not last night so I kept it. I read it again this morning and got the same reaction. Yes, on my copy there was a missing "period" but that was not the problem. This story has a nice structure to it. The word pictures are clear. There is nothing wrong with the story, it just did not work for me. But, it could work for the next fifty people who read it. I hope this writer continues to write. Again, technically I thought this was a well crafted story.

SirHal