Category: First/last3rd place
Look Dave
Copyright 2004 by asparkle2 at yahoo dot com. All rights reserved. Look Dave =====by sparkle===== "Look, Dave, I can see you're really upset about this." Jolie edged backward, palms up and out. She tried desperately not to laugh, making the words hesitant. "It was an accident." Dave glowered, encouraging the urge bubbling in her esophagus. Sand clung to the wet mane around his ears and was embedded in his beard. Glee was building. When he opened his mouth to scold, wet sand trickled from his mustache and over his lower lip. Jolie lost the battle. He spat it out and glared. Jolie giggled merrily; retrieving a plastic shovel from the now-wrecked sculpture, Dave deliberately smacked it against his hand. Squealing, she turned and fled. Jolie might have outrun him another time. Fleeing barefoot in the surf, shells pressing into her soles, was challenging. His legs were much longer. Revenge was indisputably a motive -- tackling her wasn't difficult. Jolie went down in the salty froth, sputtering, still laughing audaciously. Falling face first into water and wet sand should have warned her that an abject apology was appropriate. When she didn't deliver, Dave grabbed her hips, pulled her away from the water and forcefully rubbed her entire front into the grit. Still gleeful, Jolie couldn't stop the laughter. Dave came down on his knees behind her, and taking her hair in his fist, rubbed her cheeks in the sand. Jolie knew she looked a sight. She could feel the sand along her eyebrows and around her ears, tangling her braided locks. Still, Jolie continued to laugh. He growled. Dave's hand pressed into the small of her back and the plastic shovel scraped over her rear. "No!" she gasped immediately, but too late. He had already drawn back and snapped it hard against her bottom. He followed with a flurry of stinging smacks that bounced off her wriggling bum. When he stopped, Jolie realized her wiggling had only made the sandy predicament worse. Her body was coated in the fine, white sand. It scratched her breasts and into her curls and between her labia. "Well?" Dave barked the word, tapping the plastic deliberately. Jolie's bottom didn't hurt. Plastic shovels were hardly implements designed to impart pain. It took ten eternal seconds to find the words, but the tone was an utter failure. "I'm sorry?" Dave snorted. "You will be when I get you to our room. Or before. You'll never get that sand out. We have to walk back to the hotel." Jolie looked down as they stood, and brushed ineffectually at the sand clinging to him. He wouldn't be able to hide his arousal. Their clothes and towels were up among the hordes of free-thinking August vacationers, watching from behind dark glasses. "How about a swim first?" she asked, motioning to the sea. He took her bottom in hand and led her toward the water. "Turns out, I like the sand," he murmured. Jolie laughed again, but quickly smothered it. "Me too," she said instead. Cheekily. "Gonna spank me for that?" Dave laughed, squeezing. "Of course."
Joni email
I love playful spankings, and this is delightful. I could completely identify with the following:
Jolie's bottom didn't hurt. Plastic shovels were hardly implements designed to impart pain. It took ten eternal seconds to find the words, but the tone was an utter failure. "I'm sorry?"
and Dave's response is perfect!
Dave snorted. "You will be when I get you to our room. Or before. You'll never get that sand out. We have to walk back to the hotel."
This is a fun read, and a nice take on the first line entry. I hope you continue to write for the contest.
J*ni
Janet Miles email
Delightful! Cute story. I like the silliness, the sexiness, and the joy the two protagonists have in their relationship. Jolie's inability to keep a straight face was utterly and entirely believable, and this sentence:
It took ten eternal seconds to find the words, but the tone was an utter failure. "I'm sorry?"
made the story perfect.
Haron email
This is a lovely study of beach pleasures with a spanking thrown in. I have to confess, the fact that the male character has a mane _and_ barks had me momentarily confused as to his species :) Luckily, the female character seems to have no doubts about that - they have so much fun that I'm left quite envious.