Category: First/last
Frankly
Word count = 501 ; I wrote this for the First/Last category but, like a lot of my writing, it will fit into several categories. Copyright 2004 by asparkle2 at yahoo dot com. All rights reserved (except for SSC stuff). Frankly =====by sparkle===== "Frankly, my dear, I don't give a damn whether you want to marry him." "Papa!" "He's titled. He's wealthy. And he's offered for you. Not a combination likely to be repeated this century." As it was 1804, the insult was ninety-six times unmistakable. "The wedding will be in five days. He has already secured a special license." "I will not!" Nellie vowed. "Even you can't force me to promise in front of a church " He was relentless. "The wedding will be here, with the vicar, your mother and I, the marquis and his brothers. As God as my witness, you will not make a fuss, or I'll bend you over the *vicar's* knee and pull up your dress and switch you until you recite your vows." Nellie choked back a sob. Of course he would. He owned the entire county, including the vicar, and probably hoped secretly she would object, to give him reason. The marquis was no better. During their last waltz, he had actually taunted her. "I do hope," he drawled, "That you will decide to fight me. I have not yet determined whether you will require only a bridle and reins or if the application of a riding crop will be necessary. But it is more fun to break a spirited filly than a docile one." Nellie had been furious enough to trounce on his toe but that had only amused the brute. "I will punish you for that, Nellie," he deliberately used her childhood name. "You may be assured of a switch for your impertinence, and I will issue recompense on our honeymoon." The memory made Nellie shudder. "Please, Papa," she tried begging. "Don't be foolish, Nellie," he ground out. "You know very well that you need a man like him." "How can you say that?" she cried out, frustrated. Her father smiled. Nellie stopped abruptly and straightened. "No," she whispered, but the denial had no heat. "You asked," he said baldly. "And now you remember the last time you disobeyed me. Five days ago. When I had you across the desk and I pulled up your skirts and switched your thighs. Afterward, I forced you to part your legs, didn't I?" Nellie wouldn't couldn't forget that humiliation. He had seen her wet, forbidden places and had taken the switch to them as well. Her face was pale and she remained silent. "You were wet, a sure sign of a licentious wanton. You need a husband to keep you on the straight and narrow. The marquis will be an excellent master for your wanton body and he needs children sons." Her father smiled, cruelly, Nellie thought. "Wantonness has but one redeeming trait affection for the reproductive act." Nellie's shoulders drooped. It was true, she thought wildly. She was wanton, for she often touched herself there after her father whipped her. She must require a husband who enforced his rules with a heavy hand. Helplessly, hopelessly, her eyes dropped to the floor. "Yes, sir," she whispered. sparkle
Sarah Nada email
This story is kind of shivery, with a fairy tale atmosphere. The author makes good use of the first line ("Frankly, my dear, I don't give a damn"), and manages to pack a lot of plot into very few words. Best of all (from my personal POV), the story alludes to past punishment of somebody's "wet, forbidden places." <blush>
Sarah
Hal email
Nice story. Well constructed. In the rules there is a period after, "damm". So technically, I am not sure if this belong in the "First/Last" category or not. I also don't see this in the 'edge' category. Sure was not 'edge' to me. The word pictures were clear. But, with all of that said, this just felt like I have read this story before. Change the names and do a small edit and you could submit this ten more times. Nothing jumped out and grabbed me. No, I enjoyed reading it but that was all. With the talent shown in this story, I wonder what this writer might to with a long story. I would be interested in reading it.
SirHal
Ivy email
A good story and a great use of language to convey a time period, you were right this story could have been in a number of categories. I think that the father daughter theme is a great one and the right to have her own decisions is correct, in my opinion. An Alright story, I must say, although not completely to my tastes.