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Category: Mini-saga

Age-Play

Joni 

This is my story, don't steal it!  It's hard work writing one that is
exactly 50 words, but I did it.  Enjoy!

AGE-PLAY


"Tonight I'm your Mommy."

"You're gonna brush my hair?"

"No, I'll use the other side, girl."

"You can't!"  Protesting, she was bent, bared.

"Guess again, child."

Pain overwhelmed bravado.  The brush fell, wails arose.

Later, she turned from the corner.

"Tomorrow, I'll refresh the lesson," he said, touching his belt.

Angie

Okay, this one did confuse me just a bit -- were there two characters or three? But, I thought it was really well done. I think the best way to do mini-saga is with almost all dialogue. I haven't read a lot of mini-sagas that I really enjoyed but this is definitely up there!

Pablo

This one perhaps asks more questions than it answers. That creates a nicely ambiguous feeling - gender play as well as age play? - but also a faint dissatisfaction, not knowing whether the gaps are meant to be there or are imposed by the severe restrictions of the length.

Chantymer

Very good mini-saga. Leaves room for another session the next night.