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Category: Mini-saga2nd place

What I want

Kessily 

I'm not really sure what I want. Maybe... the touch of a hand as it
caresses my bare cheeks and makes me shiver. A light slapping that makes
my legs spread wide, then harder smacks that bring them back together to
squeeze tightly.

I'm not really sure what I want. Maybe... you?

Joni

Ah, Kess,

This is tightly written, and for 50 words, contains a lot of emotion, a lot of scenery. I like the sense of longing. Well-done!

J*ni

Angie

I am really not a fan of mini-saga, but I like some of the imagery in this -- especially the legs coming back together, because I could almost feel myself doing that. It reminded me of a personal ad, but a good one that would get a lot of response.

Haron

Well, she may not know what she wants, but I do know what this story makes me want: a cold shower! Wonderfully done; the format suits the story perfectly.