Category: Mini-saga
Sweet old rhyme refashioned
Sweet old rhyme refashioned by Alex Birch Category: Mini Saga Words: 50 Jack and Jill climbed up the hill our Jack is wondering if she will accept his bribe of half a crown to touch her toes with panties down Jill lay weeping on the grass trembling, clutching burning ass cursing Jack through tears and pain the bastard used that cane again!!
Angie email
From a spanko point of view, this is a really cute rhyme and I enjoyed it a lot. But, I really wanted it to fit the meter of the original, so I kept trying to make it fit and it doesn't, and that annoyed me. I think that has much more to do with my own neuroses than it does with the poem, so I'm going to give the writer props for a job well-done.
John Benson email
The 50 word format is so constraining that it's hard to do well. So by also making it a poem, which is also a very constraining format, you'd think it might come out a mess. This doesn't. It's easy, breezy, and cute. It seems nearly effortless. And while it's hardly deathless, it's far from lifeless. What a nice little surprise.
--johnb
Trisha Allen email
Funny little nursery rhyme. Of course, I've never heard it told this way before. Still it was quite enjoyable!