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The Clock

Category: Mini-saga

Capitulation

Rhosymedre 

Capitulation


The bastion of my pride finally crumples.

I'll accept punishment from my beloved.

I timidly present before Martin's antique desk, prepared to
hug its contours while his rattan carves mine.

He dismisses me.... Everlastingly!

"Too late."

I capitulated 7.48333 minutes *after* the 1:00 p.m. deadline.

Martin doesn't capitulate -- any time.

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SSC '04 "Capitulation"
[Mini-Saga and/or Picture, "The Clock"]
50 words. 
by Rhosymedre

Chantymer

Just like a man, you are all set to take your punishment, and he changes his mind. Very good mini-saga.

Haley Brimley

Quite a good story, even though I'm not sure I fully grasp the essence of the scene, even after several reads. Must be me. But anyway, I enjoy its directness.

Pablo

Ah, there's the hint of something very good here, but in the end there's just not enough space for it to be worked out enough. What's left is more like a sketched synopsis than something that feels whole. (Pablo)