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Category: Mini-saga

Taking Advantage of Technicalities

Joe Whatever 

TAKING ADVANTAGE OF TECHNICALITIES (MINI-SAGA) (F/M)

"But all I have on is my jock strap!" the handsome 18 year old student
wailed.

"The rules allow ONE article of clothing during a spanking, Dirk" the
pretty principal replied suavely as she lowered the blushing student's
gym shorts and teasingly ran her hand over his tight bare bottom.

Eric

This reviewer can see the intention behind this plot, but the story needs re-working to have the desired impact.

Pablo

It's a nice image, but we need a little more than this for some impact. There's no room in a story this short for character, so it mostly has to work as a cartoon, a single-frame gag. And the gag needs to be a really good one. This one is cute, but forgettable. (Pablo)

Trisha Allen

This author said a lot within the fifty-word limit. It's easy to visualize. Keep up the good work!