Category: Mini-saga
Doctor Spanko
DOCTOR SPANKO (MINI-SAGA) (M/F) "But I don't belong in an asylum" Debbie wailed. "I'm a MBA". "Get me my clothes!" "This gown doesn't close and everyone can see my butt!" Her Psychiatrist picked up the paddle. His "patient" was getting agitated, and It was definitely time for another "treatment".
Hal email
This story just did not flow. I can not point out anything technical wrong. I think a few more words would have helped it.
SirHal
Angie email
Oh, if only psychotherapy really worked this way -- I'd have been cured long ago! (Just kidding). This seems more like the start of something (or the middle of it, actually) so I don't really feel it stands on its own as a mini-saga, but I'd be interested in reading a longer version of it.
Pablo email
Hee. I love the quotation marks around "patient" and "treatment". In a simple but wonderfully effective way, they convey a hint of madness, a hint of an evil leer, and that's just what the story needs. (Pablo)