Category: Missing scene2nd place
When in Ramsdale
I can't help thinking that Tasha must have done this already, differently and better, but I haven't figured out how to search the SSC archives. WHEN IN RAMSDALE by Bird (496 words) And now, dear reader, it pains me to have to report the single incident in which I subjected my darling to physical pain, for which may my soul burn eternally. She and the McCoo girl, had, according to old McCoo in an urgent phone call, "misbehaved badly, and you better get over here real quick." I steered the Melmoth past lawns and lanes, in panic and despair that they might have been exchanging caresses with some pimply co-evals, so I was much relieved to discover, on my arrival, that the girls had merely been caught shoplifting tawdry earrings. McCoo, nonetheless thought this an offense that merited "a good old-fashioned spanking." I began to demur, blanching at the mere thought, but he pointed to the "Danish modern" coffee table required decor in Ramsdale living rooms whereon sat a copy of "Raising Kids Right," by a Reverend Bill. McCoo soon had his daughter pulled over his lap and was easily sliding her shorts down over her slender hips. Poor Ginny, knowing what came next, offered a doomed, "Please no," but a second later, her underpants fluttered at her knees. She tried admirably to press her thighs together as her father brought his large hand methodically down on her boyish bottom, but after a few minutes, cheeks turning carmine, she began to kick her legs at each impact, all modesty abandoned, and despite my distaste for McCoo, I will be forever in his debt for the views of downy ridges and winking buds that his brutishness afforded me. I thought he had finished, but he made the girl bring him a large hairbrush. I will spare my readers the details of what followed, though I have been unable to erase from my own memory the poor girl's sobs and screams and piteous pleading. When at last she was released, McCoo looked at me, and I realized that my already suspect status as a real dad was at issue. I would have to spank my daughter or else all other aspects of the relationship would be subject closer inspection. Simulating paternal firmness, I commanded, "Dolores Haze, come here." She, too, seemed aware of the fragility of our situation, for she said quietly so that only I could hear, "O.K., you can do it. Just don't touch that hairbrush or I'll blab everything." I followed McCoo's script as closely as I could recall it, even exposing reluctantly Lo's nacreous nates. I spanked rhythmically, and as her globes glowed a deeper pink, Lo yelped and kicked and wriggled convincingly enough to satisfy our audience. I made it up to her that night. The silken surface I had so recently abused I now covered with my most loving kisses, though my efforts seemed to have less effect on Lo than on me, for despite my initial tenderness, I was soon in a state of urgency demanding to be wrapped rapturously in her limbs, and through it all I wept and begged her forgiveness.
Haley email
Absolutely brilliant. A tad hesitating at first, and Lo's role is a tad overshadowed by Humbert's, but after all, that's very understandable. Lovely touch during the actual spanking (especially in Dolly's threat), and a very in-tune finale. Really appreciatable, congrats.
Alex Birch email
This is beautifully written. The writer has captured Nabokov's languid almost detached style extremely well and the scene fits in well to a book that he might have written. I like the description of Ginny's spanking, concise and sufficiently detailed to convey the scene , but described in the same almost journalistic manner which was Humbert's signature throughout the book. Very good indeed
Haron email
Oh, brilliant - I don't believe the scene would be any more authentic if Mr. Humbert related it personally. The writing is great - all the alliterations are there, as well as Humbert's little mannerisms. This story is a wonderful addition to the wonderful original.