Category: Periodshortlisted
Better Late than Never
SSC2004 Short Story 'BETTER LATE THAN NEVER' by Alex Birch Category: Period Words: 502 'Oh moooom...' Katy whined from the passenger seat '...turn that old trollop off ...and hurry. I'll be late for school!' Laura sighed and reached for the push button, silencing old Britney Spears belting her way through another Fitzgerald standard just as the radio police two way channel cut in. 'Mrs Laura Benton, driving the red Audi, registration 7543HKG5, turn left at the next junction and drive to Discipline Station X43 500 yards up on the left. Dont be more than ten minutes!' Katy gasped and Laura's face turned white. 'Y..yes Sir...' she whimpered and the channel cut out ,the noise of the radio returning. Laura slowed down, her hands visibly shaking. 'This is your fault...' she shouted at Katy . tears welling up '...my third speeding offence and you know what that means!' Katy blushed and couldn't answer as her mother reached the junction and turned on to the main road where the Discipline Station in its forbidding grey stone soon came into view. Laura, trembling, drove into the small car park and, with a glare at her daughter, got out and walked to the front door alone. She inserted her licence into the swipe slot and the doors clicked open. She walked into the empty discipline room then, heart pumping , placed her licence on the table for police inspection. She composed herself, breathing heavily, then quickly took off her jeans and panties and lay across the whipping bench adjacent to the table. She lay shivering, bare bottom raised, for ages before the door opened and she heard the heavy tread behind her. 'Mrs Laura Benton?..' the voice was deep and attractive '...I am PC Clayton designated to carry out your punishment, do you wish to appeal before I begin' Laura shook her head and whimpered 'No' as the policeman unhooked the short whip from his belt. 'Very well, 24 strokes!' he barked and Laura howled as the first lash ignited a fire in her bottom........... ...........Katy watched as her mother reappeared outside with the policeman. She watched Laura sign her punishment slip then waddle painfully back to the car. She winced as her mother, red eyed, squealed with pain when her bottom touched the driving seat, then drove off without saying a word. 'Mom if it helps..' Katy said mournfully '...I'm late for school now and thats 3 times this month!' Laura turned and managed a smug grin. 'So THAT means.....?' she asked mischievously. Katy blushed. 'Yeah it DOES and its Mr Mason on disciplinary this week!' Laura smiled through her pain 'Ah you have a crush on him..and this is your second lateness discipline isnt it. So it's panties down for the cane this time eh? What WILL you be showing him?' Katy's face reddened but she smiled. 'Yeah so I guess its not ALL bad news!' Laura squeezed her daughter's hand. 'You and I are SO alike' she grinned as she changed gear and accelerated away
Hal email
I found this to be a cute little story. The writer painted some interesting word pictures. I enjoyed the slight twist at the end. Did she speed on purpose or was it really the fault of her daughter? Guess we will have to wait for the next story from this writer when they tell what exactly happened to Katy. I thought this was strong story. I wonder what this writer would or could do with unlimited words. My only problems, and it was minor, is this seems just another story with a twist on an old topic. Daughter/son gets mother/father in trouble. I sure hope that this writer continues to write for us. I look forward to reading them.
SirHal
Tami email
So that's what the future is going to be like. Great imagination, well told story, I don't know whether to feel sorry for the characters or laugh at the comedy. Nice balance of humor and drama.
Tami
Chantymer email
Very good period piece. It is so believable as so many cities are getting cameras at stop lights and along the busier streets. Sounds like Laura had a crush on the officer who administered the discipline. Then of course Katy was going to be late for school and she had a crush on the teacher who was in charge of discipline that week. The scenario is a little bit futuristic, but certainly not impossible to imagine.