SSC-2004-04[PICTURE]: Punctuality Counts (M/M, cane) My fourth SSC-2004 entry was inspired by the one of the pictures -- the clock. It contains a scene of a caning. If such a subject is offensive, uninteresting or if you are a minor (i.e., child) please leave now. This work is copyright by the author and commercial use is prohibited without permission. Personal/private copies are permitted only if complete including the copyright notice. The author would appreciate your comments -- pro and con, including constructive criticism, and suggestions. E-mail: YLeeCoyote at mail dot com Punctuality Counts By Y. Lee Coyote The message light was flashing when I entered my pad. Master's order was simple: "BE AT THE HAWK BY 1:00." I had adequate time to shower and dress and get there on time. I left my pad at 12:44 exactly for the twelve minute walk. I walked into the bar at 12:56 exactly. Master turned to look at me, picked up the cane and pointed to the clock with it. He smiled. The clock showed 01:07:29! I knew what he expected. I dropped my jeans and bent over the pool table. I also knew the penalty -- one cut per minute. The cane cut the air and then my bare butt eight times. I wanted to yell but that would have embarrassed Master so I gritted my teeth extra tight. It was all over except for the pain when I realized that the bar clock was, like all bar clocks, ten minutes fast I had forgotten that and paid dearly. The End © Copyright A.I.L. June 14, 2004 Y. Valid return address is <YLeeCoyote at mail dot com> (Posting address is for the spammers) See my stories at http://www.asstr.org/~YLeeCoyote/ See Goldilocks stories at http://www.geocities.com/goldilocks1938/
John Benson email
Oh my.
It's so hard sometimes to find an excuse to punish a submissive who's trying so very hard to be good. And then to be tricked by... bar time. Nasty, that. (snicker) Nice touch.
--johnb
Polara email
I liked this on first read. I like it even more now that I've read it a couple of more times. There's a lot of good stuff in this tightly-worded package. The narrator has a very clear, consistent voice. As far as I can see on re-reading, you leave to our imagination whether it is a he or a she. And yet I was so convinced the narrator was a young man that I had to go back and check twice. Something about the terseness, I guess.
Haron email
The protagonist pays dearly for a mistake - no matter what the mistake actually is, I bet he or she will be particularly paranoid about checking clocks in the future. Nice little vignette.