SSC '04 Reading Chapters Differently by Rhosymedre 500 Words Entry for Picture, "The Clock" Green, red, and blue clockwork arms tick marks of time on the wall, but can't transpose the symbols -- movement and mathematics, sterile and relentless -- into life. *People* breathe life into time, making it not merely a passing, but a fulfillment. We also bend time out of its native contours and instead of heralding it for the awesome natural gifts it holds out to us, we collar it and use it as a counter of the mundane and small and restrictive. Then we harness *ourselves* to it, like we were oxen and demand it crack its whip over us and the chapters of our days. Animals don't check Movado watches, curse digital timepieces when the power goes out, measure nanoseconds via atomic chronometers, compulsively listen to commuter radio announcing the time every two minutes, or steal glances at the schoolhouse or workplace wall clock. We do. Foolish, rigid human frippery! Take my predicament of the moment. The clock hanging on the wall of Henderson Associates reads 1:07:29 from this angle. If I shifted to my right a few feet, it would change slightly to 1:07:30. A few feet the other direction and -- you guessed it: 1:07:28. Einstein's theory of relativity proven before my eyes? Wellllll... he did say time is a matter of perspective or, ahem, *relative*. So, can I claim I wasn't late for my job interview because relatively speaking I arrived close to the crucial hour? Um. No. My good reason for not entering the office before the minute hand chinked to the "12 o'clock high" position and the hour hand jogged precisely into place over the "1" is immaterial to "Ridgeway" Henderson. Nothing beyond lateness matters. As a schoolgirl, being tardy might have earned me detention. Or a slapped palm or a paddling from the principal and then a bottom reheating from Mom at home. But I'm a single adult, and my consequences are no longer those of the naughty little girl. My punishment will be economic, not corporal. Not having been a punctilious slave to the beastly timepiece will cost me a regular paycheck for an indefinite period. Frankly, I'd rather Mr. Henderson thwacked my tender, panties-down rear with that hefty straight-edge than tear up my application! Time waits for no man, they say... or woman. Actually, Time is indifferent to us. Sometimes we fancy we have harnessed Time for our own purposes, that we have mastered It, not It us. But Time is simply the mysterious force, element, or wave that holds us universe dwellers in its hermetic seal. And Time doesn't give a damn about our puny efforts to divide and conquer it. It just keeps barreling along and "laughs" when we don't see the forest for the trees -- er, when we don't celebrate the higher magnificence of Time's embrace, when we instead parse Grand Time into picayune time and fanatically genuflect to the clock on the wall. To my chagrin, time sticklers like Mr. Henderson can't share the cosmic joke. ___________________________________ Note: clock numerals are also called "chapters."
Tami email
This story is very graphic, similes, metaphors, description, it's very exact. The pleasure of reading is lost in everything is encompasses. Maybe a more direct approach would have been the key. Or perhaps I am just not in tune with the style. I definitely think the writer has a lot of potential, it just needs to be filter a little more. Please bare in mind this is just my opinion to which no value is applied.
tamishy
Pablo email
I'm not sure how deliberately this is presented as the point of the story, but there's an obvious irony here. The narrator bemoans the way others treat time - are restricted by it - but in doing so rambles away most of the available story-space with a host of imagery, leaving very little for the ostensible theme of the story. As a vivid essay on the ways in which we're slaves to timepieces, there's much to enjoy here; as a spanking story, there isn't much meat. Some praise is due for trying something very different, however. (Pablo)
Ivy Tran email
It was a good story but it has nothing to do with spanking. I like the philosophical aspect of the clock, its meanings, and Time. Time as an allusion, and not as an 8th Dimension, is what is depicted here. It's interesting that this is what this particular schoolgirl is thinking while awaiting her impending punishment. Time is what drives us, and time is all that stands between her and her punishment.