Category: School
Making a Splash
SSC2004: Story: 'MAKING A SPLASH' by Alex Birch Category: School Words: 500 The swimming gala had finished, house prizes presented and Mrs Winterton made to leave the area delighted by the evenings success, with no tomfoolery around the pool to mar the event. As she was leaving , she noticed two girls who caused her eyes to narrow and her step to slow. She secreted herself behind the end locker as Angela Thomas and Karen Jones, the school's biggest troublemakers, engaged a first form girl in apparently innocent conversation by the pool. Karen, almost imperceptibly, moved behind the youngster and sank onto all fours while Angela engaged the innocent in animated conversation. Suddenly she leaned forward and pushed, the kid toppling backwards over the kneeling Karen and falling fully clothed into the pool. As the kid howled, choking in swallowed chlorine, Angela and Karen had hysterics then, as departing parents spotted the flailing body , both rushed to 'help', making sure they fished her out and affected concern. The kid sat on the side weeping and soaked to the skin before being taken away by staff as Mrs Winterton strode down the poolside. 'Thomas, Jones...' she bellowed '...I saw what you did!! My office first thing after prayers tomorrow!!' and departed. The two girls paled. 'Oh shit..' cried Karen '..hadn't spotted the old cow there. What will she do?' 'Can't do much ..' said Angela airily '...they've scrapped corporal punishment so she can only give us detentions or expel us...and she won't do that!!' Next day two naughty girls presented themselves nervously at the Head Teacher's office and Mrs Winterton looked them up and down with disgust. 'I'm sick of your stupidity...' she barked '...and you are going to pay for it!' She rose from her chair 'Right both of you. Take off your skirts and then bend right across my desk , bottoms pushed out as far as you can!' The girls stood in shocked silence their faces white until Angela whimpered 'Please Miss, you cant..it's...' Mrs Wintertons face reddened. 'Don't tell me what I can and cant do girl!! Now DO IT!' Terrified both girls removed their skirts and lay across the desk , bottoms outthrust, trembling as they heard the Head leave the room. Too frightened to speak, hearts pounding , they stayed in place for what seemed like hours until they heard the heavy tread behind them. 'Are you ready?' both girls heard, replying with a whimper, closing their eyes and waiting ...then both shrieked aloud as the seat of their knickers was hosed down with freezing cold water which ran down their legs and into their socks. The girls writhed and shivered as the cold water seemed to run everywhere inside their panties. 'Uncomfortable, isn't it...' Mrs Winterton snarled '...now you can return to class, minus skirts, and stand, hands on heads, in front of your friends soaking like that for another hour until break...and maybe you wont try that again !!'
Haley email
Hehe, nice twist to what could've been an ordinary story. Quick, to-the-point, "dry" style... no puns intended, lol. Pungent, and it made me laugh out loud.
Janet Miles email
An excellent story! The author does a fine job of portraying schoolgirl bullies, leads up to the expected spanking, and then pulls the rug out from under the reader while punishing the girls in an appropriate manner. The only thing detracting from perfection, in my opinion, are the errors of spelling and punctuation (primarily the absence of apostrophes in contractions).
JanetM
Ivy email
A pretty average work, I guess. Good writing style although I think it could use a little more elaboration, given more time and no word limits. I think if you instilled more fear, I think that's the word, yes put more fear in the girls, the whole scenario would be more realistic.