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Six Strokes Over Knickers!
SSC2004: Story: [School] 'SIX STROKES OVER KNICKERS!' by Alex Birch Words: 496 Category: School She sat, shocked, squirming on the chair under the hostile glare of the school secretary, trying not to cry. Frequently she would glance like a frightened rabbit at the set of lights above the door which led to the Head's study, the red 'no entry' bulb continuing to glow. When the green light glowed...oh please God, no! Today was her sixteenth birthday too, begun with such joy and turned into a nightmare within seconds. It had been a wonderful sunny afternoon for the fete, the day the Kingsbury Grammar school for girls celebrated annually with their 'brother' school a mile or so away. Just one time in the year when the girls could meet with boys on common ground, begin the journey to adulthood by mixing, exchanging pleasantries, sharing a coke.. but..as Mrs Patterson had insisted at assembly that very morning... NO HANKY PANKY. The Head had spelled out in detail the severe consequences that would follow should any of the girls 'let down the school by any lewd or untoward behaviour' and a sea of red faces let Mrs Patterson know that her message was understood. She sat still and pale. She was a good girl, a credit to her parents and the school, she'd never been in any trouble before and the tears began to trickle down her cheeks. The fete had been in full swing when, catching her alone, the boy had shyly come up to her with a box of choclolates. She'd seen him before in town with his mates and feigned oblivion to his stares, though secretly flattered by the attention. He said his name was Gary, that he'd asked around and discovered it was her birthday and she was bowled over. They'd walked awhile and then he'd shyly slid his hand in hers and, after looking round for any sign of teachers, she'd offered no resistance. He told her how pretty she was and she squeezed his hand tighter when he whispered that maybe they could find a quiet spot out of the sun. She knew she shouldn't but she was spellbound and before long they found bushes at the far side of the field. He'd kissed her cheek gently and she blushed, then emboldened he'd touched her breast. At first she said 'no', but her defences collapsed as his hands roamed over her body provoking sensations she had never before experienced. She'd lain back in ecstasy as he explored her at will until suddenly the bushes parted and an angry prefect's voice barked..... "...Megan Phillips!!! Head's study IMMEDIATELY!' Here she sat, trembling in shock at the humiliation and pain to come, as the light finally turned green and the secretary barked 'Megan.. in!' but her legs couldn't move from the seat. She thought of the imminent caning , of Mrs Patterson's harsh promise so clearly outlined earlier. "Lift your skirt, girl. Six strokes over knickers!' The knickers which were still in Gary's blazer pocket!
Eric
'SIX STROKES OVER KNICKERS!' is a good example of how it pays to stay with a story until its end, no matter how you think you may have divined the plot. The good storyteller always has something in reserve. This reviewer considers that 'SIX STROKES ... ' would also be very effective if related verbally.
Polara email
Whee! No point in telling poor Megan not to get her knickers in a twist. You've definitely got my imagination creating the next part of this story. Although on the surface it is difficult to see how a previously good girl could let things go so far, so quickly, I feel you've done a good job in describing how Megan was lured to her ... doom. Well done!
Pablo email
This one was seemingly constructed backwards from the last line, but that's okay. There'd still be a nice little story without it, but with it the end has a great kick. It's a cruel lesson for Megan to learn, but then she can't exactly blame anyone else, good girl or not. It's the morality tale of the innocent tempted. Hopefully she'll learn from this, because her first bit of serious bad behaviour looks like it's ended disastrously. Fun! (Pablo)