Category: School
Dreamtime
This is the a dream I had, 5 or 6 years ago, put into words as best I can. I still remember it perfectly. -- I'm sitting on the floor of the cave. Light from the classroom next door streams through the window, highlighting the streaks and dust on the Plexiglas. It is the only illumination in the cave. The curve of the rock makes it a bit uncomfortable to sit, I'm slowly sliding down, the rough stone grabbing my jeans, slowly shoving them up my ass. There's a couple of others sitting around, I don't know, or remember, or care who they are. I'm not sure which, or if it's all three. They're faceless shadows, speaking without saying anything, or being heard. She's laying on the floor in front of me, laughing at something that was said. I know her face is somewhere in a yearbook in my closet. Some popular girl who was friendly, but always distant. Too good for someone like me. She's nude, the nipples of her firm young breasts occasionally rubbing against the rough stone. They're red and erect. I want to twist them. She's lean and supple, muscles showing where they should, and curves showing where they should. Her bottom is red and welted. The welts have the color of blood blisters. She's talking to someone else. I lean forwards, swatting her young, tight, welted buttocks. She yelps, and moans "Nooo... leave it alone!" The look on her face and the tone of her voice tells me she doesn't mean it. It hits me that I must have caused all of the damage to her bottom. She's naked for me. Spanked for me. Bruised and welted from me. Did I do that? Am I capable of doing that? Lust and revulsion rip through me. I want to spank her, to cause her pain. I'm disgusted with myself. I lean forward, my hand raised high. I'm shaking. God I want to fuck her.
Chantymer email
Novel setting for the school (in a cave). Keeps reader's attention and makes you want to know more about the girl, the guy, and their relationship.
Angie email
Wow. For me, dreams are hard to write about because I dream in disjointed "scenes" -- never a running narrative that makes much sense. And I think you captured that type of feeling here -- especially with the realization that you must have inflicted the bruises and welts because of course your dream starts after that fact, so there's something missing from the story your subconscious is telling you. Very nice job retelling this ... and I don't think I need to consult a dream book to figure out what it might mean!
Pablo email
The thing about dreams is that they typically don't have much in the way of structure, and that's true here. Without having *experienced* the dream - which is what dreams are for, after all - the images are cryptic and unconnected. This piece is never less than interesting, but as a story it lacks some, well, some *storiness*. It's vivid, but a bit random. (Pablo)