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SSC2007 - Adult - Old Friends (500 Words)

Emma bumped into Steve again at a party. They hadn't met since they were at school together 10 years earlier. He had really fancied her at school but he was just one of those geek boys she and her friends enjoyed bullying.

Emma said "I still live at home with Mum. Come back for dinner."

He still fancied her and jumped at her invitation.

"One thing though. Mum is rather strict with me." She giggled.

"What do you mean?"

"If she says I'm naughty she gives me a spanking. It's a small price to pay though for going rent free."

Steve reckoned that didn't sound so good but was just happy to be with Emma.

They walked into the lounge.

"Let's sit on the couch" said Emma.

Emma lent across and kissed Steve. "Hhhmmm. Your nice" she said. Brilliant thought Steve.

There was a noise. Steve looked up to find a woman glaring at them. "Stop that" she barked. She looked familiar but her large glasses and long hair covered most of her face.

"Mum" gasped Emma.

"And stop groping my daughter young man."

"Emma, you know what you will get for this" she said sharply.

Emma said quietly "Yes Mum, a spanking."

Steve stayed silent.

"Yes Emma. Straight away."

Emma looked downcast. Steve was too scared to say anything.

Emma bent over her Mum's lap and was spanked with a wooden backed hairbrush on her bare bottom. Steve could only look at Emma's beautiful face as she winced at each stroke.

"Your turn" demanded her Mum.

He froze. He hadn't agreed to this.

"Either be spanked or Emma gets double again now!"

Emma begged. "Please Steve. For me."

Steve was smitten by Emma and was ready to do anything she asked.

Her Mum spanked him hard. He was sobbing, his face tear stained.

He clutched his bottom.

"Young man face the wall and don't move for 15 minutes, or else."

"Emma, go to your room. Quickly girl."

Steve obeyed immediately. His bottom was throbbing and didn't dare move. He just hoped Emma would still go out with him as he did this for her.

When outside Mum threw off her wig to reveal Hayley, Emma's closest friend from school.

"Good acting Emma."

"Great wrist action Hayley. I hardly felt a thing. But what a thrashing you gave him. He'll be right scared of you now."

"Just like when we pushed him around at school, the wimp" They both laughed.

"I am so turned on Hayley. We have to make out."

"So am I Emma but I want to spank the wimp again first. Afterwards we'll kick him out and you and I will have the whole night for loving."

They embrace, caress, kiss, mouths open, tongues entwine.

After a few minutes and with Hayley's wig in place again they went back in together.

Hayley snapped "Have you moved?"

A trembling voice replied "No honest."

"Liar. You know what that means."

"Please I'll be good."

"Too late. Come here now."

Heavens! Shades of Anthony Perkins and Psycho but this time its young girl pretending to be Mama. It's an interesting idea for a plot if a little unlikely but it's the execution of that plot with which I have the most problems.  I found the story a bit too terse. Very short sentences and a lack of flow which took away any erotic or otherwise involvement in the plot.  It's a nice try and an interesting idea but it didn't work for me.

Ah!  I do like surprises, and the twist in this story did just that. I was not expecting it at all, and the writer did a fine job of leading the reader down one road only to abruptly change direction.  I felt a righteous anger at the injustice of it, and found myself daring to hope the author will do up a nice sequel where Steve gets his revenge on these two totally unlikable women.

I did, however, find myself re-checking the category this story was submitted under.  While the characters are hinted as being well into their twenties (tho I may be mistaken by reading that ten year comment as ten years past graduation), I thought the dialogue and actions made them appear more childish ... suitable for teenagers and not adults.  I wonder if this story would have fared better in a different category?

Still, the author accomplished several things, I was surprised by the twist and felt strong, differing emotions towards all the characters. And that is a basic recipe for a successful story.

Hmm.... this story has some issues that really make you want to stop reading fairly early on but the ending twist does a lot to make up for that. First when reading it, I felt it was entirely ridiculous that she would invite this boy whom she'd made fun of in school, home, not to mention telling him about her mother. There was no reason explained and it just seemed to jump from one place to the next. Luckily it was later explained the ulterior motive for her actions, and they make sense.

However, the dialogue felt campy and without emotion. When you read about two women kissing you should feel passion, sexual energy... instead... nothing.  It was a good idea that needed better implementation.

This reads best as a kind of broad pantomime. The characters aren't really believeable, their actions are scarcely motivated, and the dialogue is a bit clumsy, but there's a gleefulness to the twists and turns. It's really a fantasy scenario written to the author's tastes, rather than a story intended to have a wider appeal, but that's fine.

I find this story unsettling, perhaps because a character who starts off sort of likable ends up being mean and sneaky.  But the spanking scenes are memorable...  I would like to see a part two with lots and lots of payback. ;)