SSC 2007: You Just Missed It, by Tyr

You Just Missed It

Child You Just Missed It by Tyr F/f b/f implied

Judy and little Tommy Evans look questioningly at the teenage girl in the corner. Her bottom moves uncomfortably under blue jeans. Was she just spanked? At Sixteen?

Joan Smithers smiles like a cat eating a canary, "Jan has been bad. I took her pants down and gave her fifteen minutes with my hairbrush."

"MOM!"

"Quiet! If you complain again I'll strip you naked and give a taste of the belt for another fifteen minutes."

Jan whines quietly. Tommy, just thirteen wonders what the older girl looks like naked and under duress. His mother, who doesn't believe in spanking smirks a little laughter.

"I bet she won't be repeating what ever she did to earn that soon."

"Oh it's not over yet. Jan took the car without permission. She still hasn't passed her driving test. She's looking forward to every Monday and Thursday for a month, if I don't add to it for her attitude."

Jan mumbles, "How can I learn to drive without ..."

"Not another word. Let's see. Tommy would you like to come over and witness Jan getting spanked this month."

"I sure would."

"I don't know Joan. He's a ..."

"NO MOM! You can't."

"She's not giving me much choice Judy."

"Okay."

"Jan! Strip completely naked. I'll go get the belt. Judy if you can hold her hands, maybe Tommy can help by holding her legs."

Judy wants to protest, but goes along in support.

Tommy's getting an eyeful. Joan smiles at her boy's discovery of girls.

"No Tommy, spread her ankles about two feet apart. Jan, it doesn't count against the total if you don't stick that ass of yours right out. All that time getting whipped will be for nothing. By the way, you'll be happy to know that you will receive all this month's spankings completely nude. It'll give Tommy incentive to come over and visit. Get ready. When the minute hand hits twelve."

The loud crack of her belt snaps across the already red moons of her daughter. She screams and twists. Tommy has a hard time holding on. Each time the leather smacks like a tongue over Jello. It just finishes bouncing as the next swing licks again. The doubled over belt blazes for minutes without any break. Tommy sees how the first stroke of leather pulls on her cheeks, while the second smacks into it.

Halfway done, Joan takes a minute rest. Tommy looks up into Jan, wondering if girls are always this wet.

Joan snickers, stepping into the second half.

"Adding a minute for not sticking it right out."

Jan whines, but knows not to say anything, she just complies. Joan works exclusively under her chubbs, where the thigh and buttocks meet. She hits nowhere else now.

"Jan stand just there in front of us. Legs spread and hands on your head. When your tears dry, we'll turn you around and make you bend over. Just think Tommy, next time I'll let you spank her first to warm her up."

He couldn't wait.

I'm sorry to say I didn't like this one very much. I know this is fiction and can and should sometimes stretch the reader's imagination but this seemed to be a platform for dispensing shame and humiliation without a really credible plot to support it. I have, I'm sure, read other stories by this writer which are better constructed and more entertaining.

~ Alex Birch

Being very close to the underlying premise of this story -- teens and driving licenses -- I read with initial interest. I should admit up front that this extreme humiliation factor is far from my cuppa, but the dialogue flowed reasonably well and the story moved along nicely. It was harsh, which was the intention, I'm sure. And the author captured the "monster mother" genre quite grippingly.

Two minor issues ... I didn't think the story title matched the story itself. I had to go back, asking myself just what it was that was missed, and don't think the initial hairbrushing warranted enough storyline to base a title on. I also don't believe any thirteen year old anywhere could rightly be called "little Tommy" (or fill in your own name). It gives the impression of a much younger child, and I thought it detracted from what could have been a more interesting observation from the young man.

Well done, though.

~ IrishRed

This had some interesting detail, with mention of the girl's bottom shifting inside her jeans, the leather smacking like "a tongue over Jell-o." I have no doubt that Tommy won't hesitate to tattle at the very first opportunity to get Jan in trouble, and to get the first feel of his bare hand on her backside.

~ Kris

Fortunately I didn't miss this one (okay, bad joke). It seems like a newsgroup classic -- wonderful bits of debporn-ish humiliation combined with the alternative reality of a world where such events happened in teenagers lives. For me, the story evoked images of a skewed 1950s "Leave It to Beaver" world. So much so that I wanted to ask the author if Joan wore pearls.

~ Mija

"You Just Missed It" combines debporn elements with descriptive flair in a way that's likely to be really hot for fans of the genre and maybe a little squicky for others. The plot is bare bones, but it's enough to get the job done. Nice ending, too!

~ Sarah Nada