fan fiction
Reversal
by
the Crimson Kid

"REVERSAL" by the Crimson Kid [Category: Missing Scene/Fanfiction]
{508 words}

[Note: This story is based on the Rejuve Universe developed in the "Melody" stories by Lurking Dragon, which I'm presuming qualifies it as a work of fanfiction, and it does involve characters who are physiologically young adolescents. The character of Emma is not mine but is being used with the permission of her creator, Erin(Ponies).]

(All rights reserved. This story's setting is in the city of New Berlin on the planet Posteria Primus, late 28th century.)

Heinrich Beltran felt relief as Emma strode towards their newly-rejuved daughters' bedroom, lexanite bath brush in hand--for once he wasn't the target of his wife's annoyance.

Punishment was already occurring as Sophia, the dark-haired nude Voluntaras, had her taller blonde sister Marta lying across her chubby thighs and undergoing a solid handspanking. Marta's nightgown was above waist level, leaving her firmly-rounded posterior exposed to her sister's steadily-slapping palm.

"Stop that right now!" Emma's voice reflected exasperation as she stormed into the room.

Sophia delivered two more crisp spanks. "Marta's a tattletale, she deserves this punishment."

"That's my decision," her mother said curtly, pulling Marta awkwardly to her feet. "Only I administer discipline in this household." She addressed her sniffling, pink-bottomed Voluntaras daughter. "Sophia went to bed butt-naked, right?"

The larger twelve-year-old nodded. "Yes, Mom."

Emma frowned. "So you threatened to tell and she spanked you for tattling...?"

"Planning to anyway," Sophia interjected.

"You'll each be chastised for the spanking, since Marta clearly cooperated. Nudity's a separate offense, Sophia...But that doesn't justify your tattletale intentions, Marta." Emma sighed. "Don't think I missed seeing you both grinding your groins together either."

"What's the point of having these young bodies if we can't play a little?" Marta demanded petulantly.

"I should be naked in bed if I want," Sophia pouted.

It was difficult for the girls to adjust to the limitations of being adolescents under parental authority after being a Lesbian married couple for thirty-five years, their mother knew. She'd considered allowing Sophia to practice her clothing-free Naturalism while sleeping, but that could be an invitation to sisterly sexual activity.

"There's only one bare part of you that I'm concerned with," Emma countered, sitting down on Sophia's bed, "Bend it over my knee immediately!"

Once the nude rejuve was in position, she was thoroughly walloped by the polyplast brush's flat back. The girl quickly was blubbering while squirming across Emma's thighs, but the paddling continued until the preteen's plump rump was shining scarlet.

"Into the corner, nose touching," her mother instructed. "Marta, take your sister's place here." She patted her lap.

"Yes, ma'am." The blonde reluctantly complied, then her nightie was rucked forward and she was spanked as soundly as Sophia had been, leaving her trim southern hemispheres glowing a deep magenta. Bawling shamelessly, she went to another corner to display her exposed posterior, nightgown held up.

Emma addressed both of her new daughters before exiting. "No sex, no gratuitous nudity and no spanking except by me--those household rules will be followed!"

Heinrich entered the bedroom of the females who had been his parents during his Penitatas and Completatas days. Although they had loved him dearly then, they'd both frequently blistered his naked hindquarters--so he was ironically appreciating their red-bottomed display.

"Enjoying yourself, Heinie?" Emma's question startled him. "Looking at the girls' derrieres, that's another household rule broken...Your turn over my knee."

Two minutes later, the spanking brush was plastering Heinrich's thong-separated bare buttcheeks as his daughters watched.

Sophia giggled. "Welcome to the club, Daddy..."

{The End}

skull reviews

OK First off I have to admit that rejuve stories are just not my thing. By the time I had sorted out the relationship of two pseudo pre teens who were really a lesbian couple who had somehow morphed into..well whatever..I started to look for something original in the plot and to be honest I couldn't find a great deal. The ageing lesbians turned pseudo teens were spanked by presumably pseudo mom Emma for either tattling or going to bed naked. Er, yeah OK but for me the investment in sorting out these strange relationships was not justified by the substance of the story. Oh having a dad called 'Heinie' was a nice touch. Sorry, author. Well enough written as far as it goes but not for me I'm afraid.

~ Alex Birch

That said, this seems to be a fairly standard rendition of a "Rejuve" story. It is a bit confusing for the SCC because, unless you are fully familiar with the genre, you won't really get some of the references or the gist of what is going on. Still, I always enjoy reading about childhood spankings, so on that level I enjoyed parts of it.

~ Barrister

The beginning of this story was very confusing for me. I got the people mixed up several times and had to reread it. I think this follows the Rejuve universe well, however, it leaves a lot out and I don't feel it was complete in just the 500 words; nor was it terribly original.

~ Kate James

I'm only vaguely familiar with the "Rejuve Universe" and not particularly fond of it, so I'm declaring myself up-front.

I have read a few stories that were based on the Rejuve Universe so I read this story with anticipation. I found that the story was well written, having few grammatical errors and good character developement. The discriptions of the spankings were vivid and the choice of the impliment had my toes curling. I thought the twist at the end in which the father was also receiving punishment was very clever. Thank you.

~ Raven