I have to admit to a certain anti- prejudice here as domestic F/M stories are just not my thing and I struggle to convince myself that they fit the natural order of things. That said, I tried to read this one with appropriate objectivity. It's a pleasant enough tale, though the ending was telegraphed pretty early on and it's a fairly familiar plot for this type of story. I was conscious, too, of a few grammatical lapses, particularly within quote marks, but that's a minor quibble. Yes, it was OK, well enough written - but didn't pull up any trees for me.

To me, a story that depicts a 13 year old boy watching his mother spank his father, might be more edge than child, or some combination of the two.  I didn't care for the premise of this story and I didn't understand who Sarah was?  To be fair though, if the story had been about a father spanking his teenaged daughter and then his wife, I would have enjoyed it more, so I cannot in good conscience let that fact influence my scoring of this story.

To think that any parent might spank a child for 15 minutes is a bit silly and I think if the line had been, "I'll be finished here in two more minutes," that would have given the story more credibility and realism.

I could wish for some sensuous details, some insight into each person's feelings, or something to help me connect with any one of the characters.  As it is, I don't feel much.  Two men did something wrong, the boy is spanked until all he can do is cry and wait for the punishment to end, the man will likely take his spanking the same way, and that's pretty much it.  Perhaps if the author chose one character to commit to (since in a 500 word story, there isn't time to develop all of them).  Did the boy lie because he wanted a spanking?  Or was he motivated by solidarity between men?  Or was it that on the drive home, the proverbial Good Boy fantasized (complete with erection) about getting in trouble and his mom baring his bottom?  Did he feel guilt about getting an erection for the fantasy?  Did he need the spanking to purge the memory of getting hard to the idea?  Or was he jealous of the attention he knew his father would get?  Is this some kind of Oedipal desire to be seen as an equal, to grow out of little boy spankings and into being seen as an adult, and therefore deserving of the same punishment?

I enjoyed the word pictures that this writer painted for us.  The story had an interesting concept and held my interest from the start to the end of the story.  It had a nice flow to it and proved to be an enjoyable read.  I could not find anything wrong with the story.  I hope to read more stories by this writer.  I will note that I think either I'm lucky or we getting nothing but very good stories this time.  Keep up the good work.